Friday, February 1, 2013

Response to Inaugural Poem by Richard Blanco


     This poem by Richard Blanco struck me as a rather soulless attempt at political consolidation.  Blanco seems less like an authentic poet than a focus-tested ploy to seem more open-minded this time around; after having Rick Warren do the benediction last time they needed someone like Blanco, a gay Latino, who could make sure everybody's happy.

     The poem itself is amazingly boring and obvious.  I know that a political moment like this is not the best time for interesting, thought-provoking poetry, but this is particularly egregious in its Pete Seeger Americana pabulum.  It even brings up the Freedom Tower.  This kind of sentimentality strikes me as kind of dangerous, because it makes the inauguration a big mythical moment instead of a political moment that should be taken seriously.  It's fine for us to be proud of ourselves, but this is not 2008.  We can't pretend it was some great mass movement that re-elected the President this time.  By acting as if we are all working together as a nation, waiting to "name a constellation" in perfect harmony, it marginalizes dissent as some kind of anti-Americanism.  It's a complacent poem.

Response to "Untitled" by Ashley Koehl

Very creepy.  Reminds me of the monster from "The Second Coming" by Yeats.

I like the fact that you don't explicate what "it" is... keeps it interesting

"It delights" doesn't really impart any information... in what?  In falling, or mimicking joy?

This sort of anthropomorphism of fear... does it have a purpose?  Does this poem just say, "fear exists?"  It doesn't need a moral or anything, but it should have some point other than describing something.  

Response to "Panic" by Brian Iafolla

I love how grounded and concrete it is.  The verisimilitude allows deeper meaning to blossom instead of forcing it.

Excellent matching of eloquence and complexity with age of the narrator.

If the poem is an exploration of what it is like to have a panic attack, assigning the final line to your brother seems to suggest that you lost track of your metaphor.  Instead of continuing the exploration of what it feels like to panic, it becomes a reminiscence of a trick your brother used to pull.

Some more personal exploration, or introspection, could be useful.

Response to "Untitled" by Garret Miller



Nice texture.  Musical metaphors are well placed

I like the last two lines, with a nice message and departure from the rest of the poem.

"Wasted efforts they'll be" seems a little awkward

The message of the poem might be a little trite:  "Wake up and smell the roses"